This is the girl’s perspective of the poem The Coffee Shop by Jafar. I loved it so much, so I wrote this. You can read his poem by clicking on the link.
I’m the girl in the coffee shop
Writing about you, the boy
On the other side of
The glass door.
Rihanna is crooning in my ear
About how even if she reaches all her fingers
She can feel more than distance between them.
And that’s how I feel
Looking at you
You spot me, and I quickly
Duck my head down, pretending
To doodle in my notebook.
I see you come and sit inside
Out of the corner of my eye
You think I don’t notice you
But, I watch you everyday
When you’re not looking.
It’s been days now
My book is full of poems, about
The way the sunlight glints in your hair,
Turning it brown
And, the way you drum your fingers
On the table, impatiently
As you wait for your coffee.
-The Girl Lost In The Bookstore
You’re filling up your book with pages of him. ❤️ Awesome 😉
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Thank you, Carisa. ❤ But, this is fiction.
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I have told you earlier and I’m telling you this again that I loved it.
Thank you, Rupali. 🙂
This is really great.
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Thank you, Jafar. Again. I’m so glad you loved it. 😀
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You’re welcome. 🙂
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Awesome
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Thank you. 🙂
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🙂
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delightful and evocative poem.
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Thank you so much. 🙂
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my pleasure!
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😀
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Reblogged this on Thoughts Of A Crooked Mind. and commented:
Miss Book Thief wrote a poem with a different perspective and it has turned out be great, at least I think so.
The link to my work is below, you’d want to read it to make the whole thing a little sensible.
https://thecrookedmind.wordpress.com/2015/12/06/the-coffee-shop/
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😀
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Beautiful Rupali. I can imagine the boy and the girl. Very descriptive.
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Thank you so much. 🙂
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Amazing.
Also thanks for helping me discover another good blog.
Jafar’s a good writer. 🙂
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Yes, he is. 🙂 Thank you, Hiba. 🙂
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Pardon me if I am intruding here but I just wanted to say thanks to both of you. 🙂
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You’re welcome. 🙂
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so many lovely things happen in coffee shops!
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But, Violet, why won’t any of those things happen to me? *sigh*
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we have to make them happen, Ms Book Thief…
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*sigh* I know.
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I followed the link to the original piece. I think the two poems make a great set. The couple might too, if one of them ever dares strike up a conversation with the other. 🙂
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Thank you, Bun. 🙂
Haha, maybe one will. Feel free to imagine an ending for the story. 🙂
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I initially pictured them living happily ever after in a palace somewhere. I think I may have to slightly lower the happiness setting on my imagination. 🙂
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Haha, maybe not the palace bit. 😛
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Okay, one-room apartment. 🙂
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Maybe a two bedroom one. You know, for when they have kids. 😛
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That sounds like a great compromise. 🙂
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Haha. 🙂 Merry Christmas, by the way. 😀
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And to you! 🙂
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🙂
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Heyy, this poem is amazing and so is Jafar’s. It inspired me to write a 3rd part In the “waiter’s” view. Hope you don’t mind me sharing it
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Of course not. 😀 Share away!
Thanks, Ameena. 😀
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Thank you! 😄
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I love your name, by the way. ❤
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Aw, Thank you 😊. What’s yours?
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Rupali. 🙂 Where are you from?
Also, I’d appreciate it if you link your poem to ours. 🙂
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I’m from Nigeria. Lovely name, I’m guessing India?
And I definitely would.
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India, yes. 🙂 Thank you. 🙂 Post it soon, this is so exciting. 😀
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Hahaha, I know. Thanks for the inspiration 😄
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You’re welcome. 😀 You should thank him, actually. 🙂
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I did! 😄
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So Nice ji.
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Thank you. 🙂
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lovely ❤
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Thank you, Leyla. ❤
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Wonder writing
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Thank you. 🙂
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Geez, I feel like I’ve been there, done that. Wonderful poem!
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Haha, thank you so much. 😀
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Phenomenal writing…… got to read Jafer’s too 😛
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Haha, thank you. 🙂
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Wow I loved this version. Beautifully written my dear 🙂
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Thank you so much. xx
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That was too good ! I can feel that girl ,too! Very well expressed ♡
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Thank you, Sanskriti. 😀
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